Capetown page 7

Hello. I haven't read the rest of your capetown thing but here's what i think of this segment. I like the style where you chose to pan to certain shots/angles, so i will not talk about that any more. My critique will focus on the action.

Punch 1: He puches with his left hand in a jab motion, but think about the whole "sprinting" at an opponent thing. If i would come in at an opponent relying completely on my speed i would either do a side kick of some sort, a front kick, or if i HAD to go with a punch i would go with a hook or an upercut especially since i'm already low to the ground. You never want to jab someone in the chin/teeth cause you'll most likely break your fingers or just cut them. The breasts should be "lagging" behind due to their weight and elasticity of human tissue. The face off the woman is a tad bit off imo she looks a tad bit manly. The claw seems almost out of place.

Skipping to punch 2 where he's ontop of her and hits with his left hand again. His hand is somehow going "past" her face and her face is staying straight, A) his hand would be completely stopped by the face or B) The face would travel to its left along side with the punch. Remember, if you're hitting someone on the ground you might as well just go with palm strikes to the nose or go with a choke, or hits to the gut, etc.

Punch 3 (right hand) again her face is actually going in the opposite direction.

Last frame: I realize that this guy is going crazy so therefore he's hitting with his fists at her face, but a two handed bash would just seem infective unless he had a weapon or a blunt object in between.

Other than that though i really think that your coloring and line-art is amazing. I give props to your actual art.

Vision: 4.5 Because i thought you did well with the feelings of the scene.

Originality: 4 because though it's unique it's nothing completely new, people have gone insane before.

Technique: 2.5 Because i gave you high ratings in vision and originality for your art, style, and feelings, i also gave you a high impact for the way you conveyed the pure insanity of the moment. However i will lower technique for the reasons that commented on, basically i don't agree with the fight sequence and how the bodies react.

I hope that this helps?!?!